Suggestions for my story? I'm 14, would like to have it rated?

Post more somewhere!!! I want to find out what happens! I love it but I think it would help you more if I criticize a little. "the black windows showed me my worried face." the me and my together buggs me for some reason. I might change it to, "the black windows reflected my worried face." "scream, I" should have a ; instead. "though I hadn't heard about any in the news recently." kind of takes you away from the suspense for a moment. If there actually is a robber or killer you might want to put, "for incoming shoes." Taking out the any adds more foreshadowing. Besides that I love it! Now post more so I can READ!!!!!!!!!